This is excellent. I liked the clear explanation of the ubiquity of patriarchy. That is often very hard to get across.
You have a failure of parallelism in an early paragraph, where things are lined up nicely, but you go from the gerund, "ignoring" to the infinitive, "to deny."
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Date: 2013-07-18 12:21 pm (UTC)Two typoes in the early part--one in the first couple of paragraphs looks like the cursor slipped, one has "embraced" instead of "embrace."
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Date: 2013-07-18 12:51 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2013-07-18 03:40 pm (UTC)You have a small typo in the second sentende; I imagine you will want to fix it.
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Date: 2013-07-18 03:41 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2013-07-18 04:58 pm (UTC)You have a failure of parallelism in an early paragraph, where things are lined up nicely, but you go from the gerund, "ignoring" to the infinitive, "to deny."
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